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Well here is my attempt at diving into the world of Garrys Mod comic making. Constructive criticism appreciated, about the poses and expressions and what not, no story here just something simple to start out with.
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Why use it on construct, for me that ruins the whole comic
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I did state that there is no real story, so for me the map is irrelevant too, i mainly want peoples opinions on the ragdoll posing, then i will further my comics and come up with a story on a proper map.
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You cannot ruin something that isn't good.
It's just that this doesn't have anything at all, literally. Just mediocre posing.
And the map wouldn't matter if it was good.
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Well thanks for the first piece of criticism that i can actually use rather than meaningless pictures...
Long way to go for me then.
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The posing and faceposing is very good. Try to avoid clipping though, the biceps clips through the chest a bit in the pic of the civ shooting Breen.
Also, even though you said it was just a test, which is a viable excuse for the lack of story, you should never, EVER use gm_construct, unless it's very well scenebuilt, or used for, say a dark scene (the dark room), or such.
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Agreed.
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I'd like to see you do any better asshole
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Bah don't worry with that he is just some dumb ass troll but thanks anyway. All i need is constructive criticism :D
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When a character is talking make sure their mouths are atleast slightly open because, to me, it looks odd when there's a speech bubble and closed mouth.
Experiment with your layout 'cos that comic was ginormous. Trying cropping the images down to 800px by 600px.
The gun posing wasn't bad, better than mine atleast, try using an emitter for the gunshot. The hand posing was good, but always keep an eye on the ragdolls arses and chests 'cos they tend to sway, which you can see in last image which ruins the whole walking away pose.
Align your text to the centre rather than left or right, this helps it fit in the speechbubble better and take up white space. Also put a black stroke of 1 around the speechbubble so it doesn't look awkward on the page.
Overall, not bad for a first attempt. But I agree don't use gm_construct, I'm not saying you are but it makes the comic feel really lazy.
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Well, the posing is alright and the editing was good, only it had a bad "story" and you used the most generic map ever.
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Don't be so butthurt. The comic wasn't that great. :saddowns:
The comic needs a lot of work. Especially story-wise. The speech bubbles are too big and so is the overall size of the comic. I don't like that wannabe Web 2.0 look on the whole layout either. Keep it more simple.
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The posing was pretty decent.
Although you used construct BIG no, no one will like it and will instantly hate it even if it is a good comic.
The story didn't make much scene.
The editing on the last panel is pretty poor not sure what effect you were going for there.
Anyway work on story and improved editing of the pics although the editing of speech bubbles is fine.
And get used to people telling you your comic sucks and that you suck get used to it you can't please all the people all the time.
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Another one bites the dust..? i dont get this..
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There was no story, or reasoning. a few small panels of narration can prove effective.
like this: HERE
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