[facemonk]

The first one is here.

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[Mythos]

It's not too shabby, although I feel like some of the previous criticisms you've gotten still stand. I'm also feeling there's a bit of a problem with the plot, because there's basically no perceptible context whatsoever - the dialogue is just there for the sake of being there, it clarifies nothing of the setting, backstory or even the characters. It's just action setpiece after action setpiece. That "to be continued" ending had literally no effect on me because I have no idea who that character is or why I should care.

I apologize for being such a harsh critic, and I can tell this has plenty of hard work in it, which is always my main motivation for evaluating a comic's quality. It's just a bit frustrating because I should really like this more than I do. It's got the makings of a great comic, but it feels like a flimsy '80s action movie story-wise.

[facemonk]

Since the entire idea for the thing (no writing, no real thought, sort of just acapella) came in about the six hours it took me to do the first one, I totally understand what you mean. I just had to wrap up the introduction of sorts before I can really start to try to move it forward.

I really should have just stopped after the first and moved on to something more solid, but I'm just glad I found the motivation to even make these.