[Viper123_SWE]

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C&C appreciated!

   Credits to Joazzz for the edit and credits to Floater for the models. Thank you guys <3   

[Joazzz]

just realized that i should have done something about the windows. oh well


also you should thumb tag the original

[NikouT]

Details of the cockpit are very well made. Good job.

[TheGoodDoctorF]

More shadows in the interior might have been cool. But I'm just nitpicking. This is really cool, and definatley something I haven't seen done this well on here.

[Joazzz]

also i thought this was for Esp Wars, had i known that you were making a thread i would have smoothed out the hands

[Viper123_SWE]

Joazzz posted:

also you should thumb tag the original

Done.

NikouT posted:

Details of the cockpit are very well made. Good job.

Credits to Floater for the awesome model.

[Joazzz]

also the smoke is flat as fuck lol

[RoblixWW2]

This is something new for me. Well done Viper and Joazzz too.

[Viper123_SWE]

Joazzz posted:

also the smoke is flat as fuck lol

Ok calm down man, you did a good job. You're getting out of hand

[TheGoodDoctorF]

Joazzz posted:

also the smoke is flat as fuck lol

Do you even need us for C&C? :v

[Joazzz]

the day i start liking my handiwork is the day i stop making pictures

[Golgo 13]

Shame about the hands, they're a bit too low-poly for a FPS shot. Nice editing though.

Also, i know it's nit-picking, but the attitude indicator on it's current form would mean the plane is on the ground, but understandable since that would be hard to edit/change without advanced PP or changing the texture overall.

[FloaterTWO]

All of the dials and things in the cockpit are movable with the joint tool, i just guess Viper didn't know that

[Joazzz]

Golgo 13 posted:

Also, i know it's nit-picking, but the attitude indicator on it's current form

what if the plane has a real bad attitude

[Golgo 13]

Joazzz posted:

what if the plane has a real bad attitude

then the US Air Force is better than reported

Edited:

~ooooh~

[wraithcat]

Way way too much oversharpening.

[Joazzz]

wraithcat posted:

Way way too much oversharpening.

too much oversharpening? don't you mean too much sharpening? but yeah i can agree with that

[Viper123_SWE]

Golgo 13 posted:

Shame about the hands, they're a bit too low-poly for a FPS shot. Nice editing though.

Also, i know it's nit-picking, but the attitude indicator on it's current form would mean the plane is on the ground, but understandable since that would be hard to edit/change without advanced PP or changing the texture overall.

Ah, i didn't pay any attention to the instruments. Thanks though.

[Prototype556]

Considering this is an first person shot, where is the HUD for the helmet? If you left it out to get a better view, that's cool too, just wondering is all.

[itak365]

Prototype556 posted:

Considering this is an first person shot, where is the HUD for the helmet? If you left it out to get a better view, that's cool too, just wondering is all.

This looks like the 1960's-70's, so would they have had actual HUD's yet? I genuinely don't know.

[AFewOstriches]

Looks like the interior of a F-117, which should have had a HUD.

[Viper123_SWE]

It's actually a SR-17 Blackbird from Call of Duty Black Ops.

[ChestyMcGee]

the colour here is lovely

the composition is a bit wonky here though. my head feels like it constantly wants to look up to see more of the sky and less of the cockpit. this is partly for compositional reasons but also for realism's sake - pilots don't fly, especially not chase a bogey, looking down at the instruments. i know you probably did this so you could show off the cockpit model but it's a bit uncomfortable

as i think someone else said, some cast-shadows from the canopy frame into the cockpit would be nice (although actually i'm not sure whether we're above the setting sun here or not)

i think the darkness of the cockpit is partially what's upsetting the balance of the composition too - it's all just a bit too contrasty. this isn't helped by the very solid dividing line straight across the middle of the canvas. it's very divisive. this can be quite a powerful effect but i dunno whether it really works here

in terms of story, the composition doesn't sell much either. without some military knowledge (ie. i knew that the cockpit was either an f117 or a blackbird, and i know that the plane on the left is either a c130 or an ac130) it'd be impossible to know which planes on the screen are on which side. it might have been cooler if the protagonist's plane was chasing down the mig as it dives on the c130 or something - that way you'd know that the mig was after the c130 and that the protagonist was defending it. maybe that's not the story you wanted to tell but the point i'm trying to make is that it should be more clear what's going on

really nice editing though

[mcharest]

Viper123_SWE posted:

It's actually a SR-17 Blackbird from Call of Duty Black Ops.

Weren't the SR-71s high-altitude reconnaissance aircraft, not dogfighters? Not that I care about authenticity. This still looks awesome.

[Viper123_SWE]

ChestyMcGee posted:

the colour here is lovely

the composition is a bit wonky here though. my head feels like it constantly wants to look up to see more of the sky and less of the cockpit. this is partly for compositional reasons but also for realism's sake - pilots don't fly, especially not chase a bogey, looking down at the instruments. i know you probably did this so you could show off the cockpit model but it's a bit uncomfortable

as i think someone else said, some cast-shadows from the canopy frame into the cockpit would be nice (although actually i'm not sure whether we're above the setting sun here or not)

i think the darkness of the cockpit is partially what's upsetting the balance of the composition too - it's all just a bit too contrasty. this isn't helped by the very solid dividing line straight across the middle of the canvas. it's very divisive. this can be quite a powerful effect but i dunno whether it really works here

in terms of story, the composition doesn't sell much either. without some military knowledge (ie. i knew that the cockpit was either an f117 or a blackbird, and i know that the plane on the left is either a c130 or an ac130) it'd be impossible to know which planes on the screen are on which side. it might have been cooler if the protagonist's plane was chasing down the mig as it dives on the c130 or something - that way you'd know that the mig was after the c130 and that the protagonist was defending it. maybe that's not the story you wanted to tell but the point i'm trying to make is that it should be more clear what's going on

really nice editing though

Thank you for feedback. Yeah, at first it was just going to be a pic of the Blackbird interior but i added the MiG and the C130 to make it less empty.

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mcharest posted:

Weren't the SR-71s high-altitude reconnaissance aircraft, not dogfighters? Not that I care about authenticity. This still looks awesome.

Correct.