[Wolf7053]

Hey Guys! Sorry it`s been awhile since i`ve posted anything."Tech Difficulties" Have occured.This film was meant for Halloween.But it got delayed so sorry about that, anyway enjoy the film hope you like it.
More Views deserve to be seen on my videos and subscribers enjoy...

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FGl_Ucq10Ac

[AFewOstriches]

Because apparently you can't use video tags, here:

[Cone]

That editing almost gave me a seizure. Here's a little tip: don't make your videos physically painful to watch unless there's a good reason for it, randomly distorting everything so much that I can barely tell what I'm looking at does not make for a fun experience.

[madmanmad]

Ok so i'm just going to break the video down into pieces here.

-Just over half of the video was nothing but music and opening credits. Try to shorten the credits to leave more time for the main piece.

-There was alot of shit flashing about that hurt my eyes.

-The lack of sound was really odd, then suddenly it's back when the helicopter shows up, and then the sound vanishes afterwards again. Some music and sound effects to set the scene would of improved everything a ton.

-The entire story is told in plain white text on a black backround and almost nothing is actually shown. This is not a good way to tell a story, if you went to see spider-man and the movie was text on a black backround saying "Spiderman goes and punches venom" and then there is a picture of him doing that for about 5 seconds, you'd get up and walk out of the theater.

Try to show whats going on rather than just writing whats happening on screen.

-The end of the video spazes out and what looks like a train flashes on screen a few times, did somebody get hit by a train or what?

-The FRAPS logo was visible on screen, i'd recommend either cutting it off or trying to find other recording software.

[Doctor Dave]

This is from the same guy who did that Desert Storm video.

[Death_God]

Doctor Dave posted:

This is from the same guy who did that Desert Storm video.

oh god you're right

[Angry man]

Your going to look back at this, After getting better from taking these guy's advice, and be like what the fuck was i thinking.

[Jesus Rulz]

Advice: Look at some of the more popular well done Garry's Mod machinimas out there. Then, once your movies are to a quality that at least can rank with that, release it to the public. I myself have to take this advice, but you my friend should heed it. Seriously.

Edited:

Also, dont make a poll where 4 of the answers are saying pretty much the same thing. In fact, dont make any polls for your movies until they are really really good.